Imitation of Film: Here’s Smoking at You Kid
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In the passage “Imitation o Film: Here’s Smoking at You Kid” by Nicholas Balakar, on which he states that children ages 10 to 14 tent to smoke more if they see actors smoking in the movies. Also researchers said that the 38% of children who start smoking do it because they trying to imitate what they have seen in the movies. I agree with the author because children ages 10 to 14 are looking for their own identity, they are very vulnerable and easy to be influenced by media when there no one to supervise them.
Teenagers look for an identity everywhere, especially, when no one is there to supervise them, which occurs in most of the cases. Unfortunately, they find that sort of identity in the wrong places such as movies, where they favorite actors and actresses besides looking pretty, handsome, interesting and apparently having a lot of personality, have the habit of smoking. These characteristics are exactly what they looking for in order to be popular as them. In addition teenagers like to experiment with anything new or prohibited. Therefore, they are easy to be influenced by any type of addiction like smoking because of their vulnerability to the new things.
Dr. James D. Sargent, the lead author on the study and a professor of pediatrics at Dartmouth Medical School said that “R-rated movies contain twice as much smoking” and those are viewed for children from fourth and fifth grade. This only shows the range that media can have since everywhere. For instance, the movies rated R on theaters require ID because they can’t be viewed by anyone under 17 since the content is considered too mature for younger viewers. However, media is not only on theaters, but also in the black market which anyone can find on the streets, and it is easy to afford it. For example, last week my ten year-old nephew asked me to take him to see Paranormal Activity 3 movie, so I respond no because it was R-rated, so he couldn’t see it. Then he said that his friend had told him what happened in the movie because his friend’s parents bought a copy of the movie on the street, so the whole family saw it including this kid who is only 10 years old. In this case not only media but the lack of consciousness of parents makes teenagers and easy prey to catch.
In conclusion, due to the vulnerability of teenagers while looking for an identity makes them easy to influence by media into an addiction as smoking. More over parents lack of consciousness that leave our adolescents out of protection and how Dr. James D. Sargent says “This association should be taken very seriously.”
Hello.I am a student in Dr X's class and i was asked to give you feedback on your revision of the CAT. First of all, i think your claim/thesis is very clear because i understand what you were saying and you gave some very good points. Next, you reasons connect to the topic well and are easy to understand, One reason i like was when u said "Teenagers look for an identity everywhere, especially, when no one is there to supervise them, which occurs in most of the cases". Also, your evidence was detailed and concrete, as for example when you write about "due to the vulnerability of teenagers while looking for an identity makes them easy to influence by media into an addiction as smoking" i agree the media can influence young tennages to smoke at a young age. Lastly, I would like you to know that the whole summary was easy to read. Good Job!
ReplyDeleteHello. I am a student in Dr. X’s class and I was asked to give you feedback on your revision on CAT.
ReplyDeleteI think you claim/thesis is very clear because you are connected to the topic and presenting your point of view.
One reason I like was “Therefore, they are easy to be influenced by any type of addiction like smoking because of their vulnerability to the new things”.
Your evidence was solid but general and you used the quotation “R-rated movies contain twice as much smoking” and those are viewed for children from fourth and fifth grade.
Lastly I would like you to know that you did a good job.