The Dangers of Reality TV
(Rewriting)
Long time ago, the Romans invented the circus in order to entertain their population’s minds. Nowadays, we have something very similar to the Roman circus, and it is called reality TV. According to the passage “The Dangers of Reality TV” by Timothy Sexton, reality television minds in order to manipulate them. Sexton states that reality television is promoting competition as a key of success in shows such as Survivor and Who Wants to Marry a Multimillionaire. Another message is “image rather than ability” says Sexton, and the best example for that is American Idol, where no matter how talent a person can be if he or she has no personality, there will always be someone who is prettier. The last message to be mentioned by Sexton is that reality television doesn’t care about education and make the audience to believe in that. For reality TV there is no reason to go school for many years if people can get plenty of money by eating bugs and doing nasty things like in the show Fear Factor. I agree with the author, when he says that reality television promotes competition in order to reach success, image is more important than talent and education is not important because the people who are strongly influenced by these messages are teenagers who are inexperienced, and they are just developing their own criteria. Therefore teenagers are an easy prey for reality TV makers who want just block our way to education.
Timothy Sexton says that reality TV is promoting competition in order to reach success, and we can see that in our daily life. For example, if a girl in the reality shows Who Wants to Marry a Multimillionaire has pretty hair, and she uses Pantene shampoo even when she is doing it just for publicity, a teenager girl who is looking for acceptance at high school and who wants to look prettier than other girls, will use it too because she wants to look pretty just as the girl in the reality show. Moreover, a teenager girl would think that she will win a handsome boyfriend or the most popular guy at school that can give her everything she wants, and she will grow up with the same idea in her head.
Sadly, reality television not only influences teenagers with non-sense competitions but also adults, which is worse, with the idea of image rather than ability as Sexton says. It happened to two of my close friends who were absent at school for long time. One of them my friend Carlos who was a good student, but he became ill of kidney condition, which took him out of school for four months. When he came back to school, he tried to get on the same level with the rest of the class and took several tests. Unfortunately, he didn’t pass all of them. I have to mention that it was the la of three years of school, so it was the year of our graduation. Then Carlos asked for a second chance, so he would have time to prepare, but our professors said no to him. Carlos couldn’t graduate in that year. On the other side was my friend Joanna, who became pregnant, and she was absent in class for three months because she was ashamed. Joanna’s grades weren’t real good, but she was very pretty. In fact everyone at school used to say that she was the most beautiful girl in the premises. The professors said that because it was the last year of school there was no reason to keep her stock in the same thing, and Joanna got her certificate without any challenge, and without any knowledge. This only proves that Sexton is right when he says that reality television transmits the idea that beauty is more important than any talent and people doesn’t even realize that they following it. Moreover, he is right about reality television promotes no education just as teaches at school did with my two friends. Carlos tried really hard, but Joanna didn’t have to. She only had to become pregnant and to be pretty in order to get the award as in reality TV where the pretty girl, even though she has no education or any talent, gets everything, nice and easy. Therefore people especially girls think that it would be that easy and not only at my school if not in my entire culture, but Joanna she didn’t even eat bugs.
In conclusion, we should be smart and think twice about what we watching, so we won’t influenced by the circus today called reality TV and we won’t be what the Romans meaning “reality” TV makers want us to be which is a “reality fan” without real education.
Hello. I am a student in Dr. X’s class and I was asked to give you a feedback on your revision of CAT 1.
ReplyDeleteFirst of all I think your claim/thesis is somewhat confusing because you start well and then you went out of topic. And I really couldn’t understand what you were trying to tell at the end of your blog.
Next, your reasons connect to the topic well and are easy to understand. One reason I liked was “reality television minds in order to manipulate them.” Your reasons are good, but you are copying them from the author. You need to have your own original reasons and try to keep related to the topic.
Also, I could not understand your evidence. Lastly I would like you to know that the whole was hard to read because you mix your ideas and bring other topics which they are not really in common with the topic. You start well and I like your first paragraph, try to connect to the subject.
Hello .I am a student in Dr.X'S class and i was ask to give you a feed back on your revision of
ReplyDeletecat 1.
First of all i think your claim/thesis is somewhat confusing you were telling stories through out the summary.
Next i think your reason was clear stating that reality TV is all about competition one reason i like is where reality TV stars have a lot of influence on people lives where by someone in high school want to be accepted by their peer and do what they see on TV.
Also your evidence was kinda brief and short.Lastly i would like you to know the cat was hard to read cause you had everything mixed up maybe next time you should write your claims build it and then your evidence separate rather all over.